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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foregin country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #reason #language #travel #work #foregin #country #someone
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reason
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about learning
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to learn
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 any foreign
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. Some
people
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 learn it in order to travel abroad or
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requirement
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requirements
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,
other
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others
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 say that learning any foreign
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above mentioned
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 reasons. I think that learning
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 could be
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a lots
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 of
reason
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reasons
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 which I will explain below. First of all, some
people
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 learn other countries'
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language
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languages
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 in order to be eligible for
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job
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a job
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 or they think that they will use that
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 to communicate with the
people
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 of that
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 in case they get a chance to travel to that
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. As most
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the
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foreign countries have made laws about the
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 to be used by the employees of a particular organization
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to
fulfill
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this
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 requirement
people
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 from other countries learn
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language
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the language
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 of that particular
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 before travelling or working there.
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the majority
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 of the doctors in Pakistan are learning
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the German
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 requirement for foreign doctors in Germany. And the other side, learning
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 could
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people
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a Foreign
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language
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 as they want to explore the culture of that
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 and ultimately
language
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 is connected to the culture.
Beside
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 that, some individuals learn
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language
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 of
certain
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country
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 in order to be confident
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research
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a research
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 study proved that almost every third person
Pakistan
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 can speak more than three other languages. In my opinion, I think it's good practice to learn and speak
different
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language
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 for any valid reason to get
good
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job
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 in my own
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. To summarise all, I must say that motivation for learning
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a foreign
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language
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 varies from person to person but
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, it's good practice to learn
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language
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 other than our native
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