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Nowadays more and more people are using cellphones and computers to communicate, so they are losing the ability to communicate with each other face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#people #cellphones #computers #ability #face
Given are two graphs concerning internet users.
While
 the former table reveals the number of online users in five distinct metropolises namely Switzerland, Germany,
France
, Spain and the UK in 1995, 2000 and 2004, the latter pie chart demonstrates the figure
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 shopping online in these countries, in 2004.
Overall
, almost all data observed a progressive growth pattern and the highest proportion of online shopping belonged to
France
. In terms of the information of online participants, the UK had the most netizens. In spite of starting from exactly 16 million people in 1995, it exponentially and relentlessly hiked to 41 million people in 2004, closely followed by
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Germany with 5, 314 and 15 million people in 1995, 2000 and 2004 respectively. Meanwhile, Internet users
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France
, Switzerland and Spain in 2004 minimally increased to over three-fold of that in 1995. With regard to the data
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 e-commerce in 2004, that in
France
 took up the first rank. At the opposite end of the scale, that in German constituted the least significant. Meanwhile, Shopping online in Switzerland accounted for the second most remarkable proportion.
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