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Given are two graphs concerning the
internet
 issue.
While
 the former table indicates how many
internet
 customers are in numerous countries in Europe, the latter pie chart demonstrates the figure
of
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 e-shopping in these nations. One particularly interesting fact highlighted in the first chart is that there were
up-ward
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 trends witnessed in almost all data except for Germany.
In addition
,
it is clear that
an
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 overwhelming majority of online shopping in the second graph is
France
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. Regarding the table, launching at exactly 16
millions
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 in 1995, the number of
Internet
 users in
UK
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the UK
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 climbed slightly by 6
millions
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 after a
half decade
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, before accelerating exponentially to 41
millions
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million
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 in 2004. In stark contrast, that in Germany had an initial point
at
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 5
millions
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, followed by a vigorous explosion
at
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 314
millions
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 in 2000, which reached its peak
since
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 1995.
Subsequently
, it drastically slid away to its bottom line
at
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 15
millions
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at the end
 of the period. Notwithstanding the homogenous progressive growth patterns,
Internet
 customers in France and Switzerland bear little resemblance in
level
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 of growth.
While
 the former has a gradual growth from 1
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 to 4
millions
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, the latter steadily
rise
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 between 2
millions
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million
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 and 6
millions
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 during a 9-year time epoch.
Likewise
, starting at the smallest point at 0.5
millions
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 in 1995, that in Spain consistently hiked
at
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 precisely 2
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 of the stage. In terms of the provided pie chart, no other proportions are as high as
Internet
 sales in France, which accounted for roughly 45%. At the opposite end of the scale, the trivial part belonged to those in Germany with approximately 20%. Meanwhile, e-shopping in Switzerland took up the second most remarkable percentage with around 25%.
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