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Many students decide to further their study abroad. What are the benefits and drawbacks of studying abroad?

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Nowadays, more and more young
students
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 prefer to
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 abroad. Some people treat
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 as a positive trend,
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 others do not think so. In my view,
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 there are several understandable reasons why
students
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 choose to
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 in a foreign university or college, I believe it is a negative trend. On the one hand, some undeniable benefits actually could be brought by studying in a foreign area. The first one is independence.
Students
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 who go to a totally unfamiliar country and
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 there for many months to years would have to learn how to live alone and deal with everything in their lives by themselves.
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 means that these young people may have more chances to face loneliness and isolation than their old friends who
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 in domestic universities. In
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 case, these international
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 would depend more on themselves to solve every possible issue.
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, they may experience more hard times when going abroad to
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 and live.
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, the drawbacks are
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 obvious when looking
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 into the consequences and achievements alongside their overseas
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. The paramount importance is a broader horizon of the world and deeper insight into the prevalent phenomena and current situations in different societies worldwide. These experiences and the ability of critical thinking could provide more opportunities to these new employees when they finish their education in universities and turn to job seeking. In
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 way, more experiences in different cultures and cooperation with various people with multiple backgrounds would be a better choice. In conclusion, in spite of the possibility of facing more undelight situations and experiencing hard times, the advantages of studying abroad outweigh its side effects and,
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, I believe
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 is a positive tendency.
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task response
Make sure to address the prompt directly and clearly state your position on whether studying abroad is a positive or negative trend.
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Create stronger topic sentences for each paragraph to enhance the organization of the essay. Ensure that each idea is connected logically and cohesively throughout the essay.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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