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Better driver education for better driving habits is more effective than heavier punishments for driving offences. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#driver #education #habits #punishments #offences
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Society is based on
rules
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, behaviours, and agreements between human beings.
This
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 type of agreement regarding the behaviour is created in order to generate a good place to live and transit.
One
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 of the most important
rules
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 is associated with
driver
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 culture. Briefly, driving is regarding driving a car on public highways.
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, as a community, we have some
rules
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 to follow and habits in order to contribute positively and we have hard
punishments
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 for
people
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 who don’t like to follow the norms or simply commit mistakes
while
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 driving. On the
one
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 hand, there are communities that believe firmly; that a better
driver
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education
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 is the pillar of a society very polite and organized in terms of driving in the streets.
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 kind of
education
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 could generate good habits at the moment of driving a car.
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, give pedestrians the red light to cross the avenue or the zebra. A better driving
education
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 creates knowledge and good behaviour when
people
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 act as a
driver
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. Empathy is
one
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 of the most important values at the time of drive.
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,
people
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 believe that
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 kind of methodology generates awareness from the beginning of
driver
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 lessons.
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, there are several
people
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 who think of
punishments
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 for
driver
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 offences in order to mitigate the misbehaviour of the
driver
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 on highways or spaces designated for vehicles.
People
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 consider that
punishments
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 as big amounts of money must be paid when
people
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 break the
rules
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 or the law.
According to
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 recent studies, about 45% of the population considers paying fines as the most effective way to change bad behaviour when individuals are driving. In conclusion. There are two points of view.
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,
education
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 drive always will outweigh
punishments
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 for drivers, because the community will have a good lesson about how to drive a car
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 and take care of pedestrians, inter alia.
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, paying the fine just solves
one
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 problem, but does not solve the future errors that
people
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 will have during driving actions.
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