Some people think government should focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems to help prevent illness and disease. To what extent do you agree or disagree. #people #
Many individuals believe that
government
should focus on abating environment
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environmental
pollution
and housing problems which help people
to prevent many diseases
and illnesses. I agree with this
statement and in this
essay
I will discuss Add a comma
essay,
from
my own view.
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it from
To begin
with, it is admittedly true that many diseases
were started from
housing. In recent Change preposition
by
time
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times
people
are going
Verb problem
have become
to
careless about their lifestyle which Change preposition
apply
effect
Verb problem
affects
them
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apply
to
their Change preposition
apply
life
. In Fix the agreement mistake
lives
this
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cause,
cause
many Correct your spelling
case
diseases
were increased at present time. This
problem
is not only an individual problem
but also
it can effect
a society and nation. Correct your spelling
affect
In addition
, environment
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environmental
pollution
has become increased
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is increasing
day
by day
which is also
harmful for
mankind. Frequently, Change the preposition
to
people
are throw
they are housing Change the verb form
are throwing
are thrown
product
on Fix the agreement mistake
products
roadside
or other places where they live. It is not only harmful Add an article
the roadside
for
society but Change the preposition
to
also
harmful for
the Change preposition
to
environment
.
However
, if government
are able to Add an article
the government
reducing
Change the verb
reduce
environment
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environmental
pollution
and housing problem
then
it is possible to prevent many diseases
. For example
, according
to Change preposition
in
last
10 years, in Bangladesh
more than 5,000 Add a comma
Bangladesh,
people
died for
cholera dengue and malaria every year. In recent Change preposition
from
time
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times
government
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governments
were
started to campaign against those Verb problem
have
diseases
and a
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have a
big
amount of Correct word choice
large
invest
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investment
for
reducing that Change preposition
in
problem
which outcome is positive for people
. Government
should aware Correct article usage
The government
people
so that they were
abate Verb problem
can
pollution
, otherwise
this
problem
will increased
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increase
day
by day
. If an authority focus to
solving Change preposition
on
pollution
and housing problem
then
we can prevent lot
of disease.
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a lot
To conclude
, pollution
problem
and housing Fix the agreement mistake
problems
problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
has become
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have
increase
Replace the word
increased
day
by day
. In this
season many diseases
also
increase so if government
would focus Add an article
the government
those
problems Change preposition
on those
then
they can prevent a lot of diseases
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