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In some culture, children are being told that they can achieve anything if they work hard.What are advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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Hard
work
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children
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 hard
work
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 to
their
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 successful life. In my
opinion
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 there are
procs
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pros
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 and cons of
this
 scenario which will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, in some cultures of the world parents and guardians start motivating their
children
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theor
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an
 early age to
work
 hard
for achieving
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 their goals.
This
 makes them
to
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use their potential
as well as
 power in the right direction. There are
less distraction
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in
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 their way to success and they remain focused. Through
this
 motivation, they develop the habit of doing their
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at
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 their own whether it
was
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 easy or tough for them. It
enhance
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 the
will power
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 of the
children
.
However
, sometimes pushing the child towards hard
work
 may
leads
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 to
downgrade
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their
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 level of performance. For
intance
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instance
: -
a
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research
in
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the
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cambridge
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 university
forund
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found
 that when
hard working
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children
did
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 not get
their
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favourable results, it
make
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 them feel low. It is
also
 observed that it
adversly
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adversely
 affects
thier
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their
metal
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 state of mind. In conclusion, hard
work
 not
always
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 leads to achievements in
the
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life but
also
 there is another side of it which will have
great
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 impact on the
mind
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minds
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 of
children
.
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