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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that a lot of qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to work in areas like engineering, computing and medicine.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that a lot of qualified
people
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 are moving from poor to rich
countries
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 to
work
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 in areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Now
people
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 are beginning to realize that by encouraging the movement of
such
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people
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, rich
countries
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 are stealing from poor
countries
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.
While
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 others feel that
this
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 is only a natural movement of workers around the world. Personally, I tend to think that of course
people
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 have all rights, where they want to live and
work
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.
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, it is well known that earning
money
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 and bringing up a family are not easy things to do. What I mean here is that they move to another
country
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 not only to travel or to have fun. One of the main reasons behind
that is
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money
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 for
better
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a better
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 life. A good case in point is
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immigrants from our neighbour
country
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 Uzbekistan. They are working in our
country
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. I think it is because they are not able to earn enough
money
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 in their native town. They live and
work
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 here in Kazakhstan and send
money
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 to their families.
On the other hand
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, it can
also
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 be argued that more and more
people
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 from developed
countries
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 continue working in our places.
That is
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 to
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 they are qualified specialists in some spheres,
go
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and go
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 to another
country
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 to train local citizens
new
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in new
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 skills. Take
for example
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 a base
which
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 is situated in
Tupkaragan
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the Tupkaragan
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 region. About 40 per cent of employees there are
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foreigners. They usually hold executive positions,
although
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 local
people
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 do the hard
work
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. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account I can say that it is better to be a simple worker in your own
country
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 rather than being a king in another
country
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. Because
growth
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the growth
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 of our Motherland is in our hands.

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