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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
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The graphs illustrate
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 outcome of
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 adult education. The first bar chart provides the main reasons
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why grown
poeple
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people
 decide to take knowledge.  The next graph gives information about
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how individuals could
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divide
decide
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finances
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 for education.   
Overall
, it is
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noticeable
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 that the greatest proportion of attraction
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 is people's interest in the subject and it is important to note
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the largest proportion cost of
study
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According to
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study
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,
also
 38% to gain
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a qualification
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 and at least 9
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for
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meet
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 with new people.
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 that
study
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their current
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 job as similar with percentage
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apply
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to improve prospects of promotion and
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who
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enjou
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enjoy
 learning. 12% choose
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 to
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 to change jobs.     In relation to
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the cost
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 of
corses
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courses
, the highest percentage is 40% that should be paid for
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the course
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 is individuals and 35% are employers. The lowest number of
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supporters
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 is  taxpayers 25%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words study with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • stakeholders
  • pursue further education
  • financial contribution
  • survey results
  • policy implications
  • correlation
  • adult education
  • distribution of costs
  • significant differences
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