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It is better for students to study from rather than go to school. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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 some argue that studying at
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a privacy
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privacy
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 home
also
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 helps
student
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students
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 to be more desirable than studying at
school
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, I believe that the
school
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’s education system
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 is the best way to improve student academy. The first reason is that the space of the
school
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 is suitable for educating scholars.
There
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 are provided several modern equipment to support them. It is understood that students now need to learn many subjects so the equipment will be used to support them.
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, the
school
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 have conditions to avoid temptation
such
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 as video games and being outgoing. In
school
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, all your time is managed to organize suitably. That helps you to concentrate on studying.
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, the
school
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 created a timetable for learning
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 break time so that students can be comfortable and freedom. The vital reason is
that
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the appearance of the teacher. Teacher is like
as
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the
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a
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 big library having a lot of experiences to teach their learner. Their mission is in the company of their student. They will tutorials or share knowledge that they
owned
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. Not only that, you can see them as your
friend
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friends
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 because they can sympathize with your soul.
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, you will be confident or docile in your study. In conclusion, the
school
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 have many conditions to support you in becoming your best individual.
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, the
school
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 is like
as
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apply
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your second home, so studying at
school
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seem
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seems
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as
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like
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 studying at home.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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