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A glance at the given process reveals the lifecycle of butterfly through the several steps.

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A glance at the given process reveals the lifecycle of
butterfly
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a butterfly
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 through
the
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several steps.
To sum up
, it can be clearly seen that there are five stages of developing butterflies, which
starts
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 from laying
egg
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an egg
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 and being mature in the latter phase. First of all, in the former step butterflies lay
egg
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an egg
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 in the leaf, where the development of
these
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 process become
as
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a caterpillar.
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further
 in the next point of the cycle,
caterpillar
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the caterpillar
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 wrapped by leaves and turns to the chrysalis.
Then
according to
 the development of chrysalis emerges adult form of butterfly by going out of the leaves.
Moreover
, at the final stage,
nymph
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 turns
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into
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adult
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an adult
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.
Therefore
, all these cycles will
have been continuing
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 and
repeating
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repeat
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 again
through
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throughout
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 their lifetime.
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