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It is better for students to study from home rather go to school.Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#students #study #home #school
Many individuals think that
students
 should
study
 from
home
 rather
go
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than go
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 to
school
.In my opinion,I disagree with
this
 statement.I will explain why in the essay below.
Firstly
,
study
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studying
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 from
home
 is convenient because you can learn without
go
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going
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 out or
go
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going
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 to
school
,but there are lots of negative effects from
this
.The first reason is
students
 can not concentrate on studying.When you
study
 at
home
,you will
study
 on smart devices,
these
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which
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 will attract you
such
 as games,
social
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and social
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network
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networks
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.
This
 problem causes
lost
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loss
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knowledge
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of knowledge
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,
can not
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inability to
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 follow
with
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up with
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classmate
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classmates
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 and
get
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getting
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the
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apply
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low points when
have
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having
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exam
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exams
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 in
school
.The next is
gett
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get
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 knowledge,it is too difficult to understand when you
study
 from
home
 because lots of things will steal your mind from studying.
Secondly
,the teachers
fell
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feel
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 unpleasant when
teach
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teaching
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 for
students
study
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to study
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 from
home
.In
school
,it is difficult to teach
beacuse
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because
 most
of
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apply
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peole
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people
 are passive and they do not focus on the lesson,but more and more
in
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at
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home
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the home
a home
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.Teachers will look like talking themselves and
fell
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feel
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 alone and bored.
Finally
,it is not suitable for old teachers who do not
hace
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have
 data about the technology,they need
the
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apply
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time to adjust
with
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to
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these
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this
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. In conclusion,I strongly disagree
about
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that
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students
 should
study
 from
home
 rather
go
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than go
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 to
school
.
Go
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Going
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 to
school
 will create disciplined people because
students
go
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who go
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 to
school
is
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are
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 more intelligent than others.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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