The two pie charts illustrate why British do migration to and from during a question period.

The two pie charts illustrate why British do migration to and from during a question period.
The two charts give a comparison of the reasons for migration to and from the United Kingdom in 2007.
Overall
, having a definite job is the main logic for migration both to and from the UK
whereas
formal studies consist of a large portion of the exodus’s cause and more emigration cases reported no reason for their travel. Starting off with transfer occurrence, 30% of participants stated that they are looking for a definite job in Britain. 26% mentioned other reasons for their expedition
while
accompany/join was the main rationale for 15% of travellers. The rest of the partake reported they were looking for work in England (12%), mentioned other logic (11%) or ultimately stated no reason for their journey (6%), respectively. Turning to people who travelled
elsewhere
from the UK. Similar to exodus cases, most of the participants (29%) said they are looking for definite jobs
while
22% mentioned searching for work as their main incentive for emigration a 10% increase relative to the immigration cases. Almost one-fifth of them did not report any reason for their travel, which is 3 times bigger than the contributors to the immigration group. Others who emigrated from the UK reported other reasons, to accompany/join, or formal study as the purpose of their trip with 14%, 13%, and 4%, respectively.
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