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Parents are the best teachers. Do you agree or disagree?

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ACCORDİNG TO SOME, PEOPLE
PARENTS
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 ARE THE BEST AND FİRST TEACHERS BECAUSE EDUCATİON STARTS AT HOME WHERE
PARENTS
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 BRING UP THEIR
CHILDREN
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.IN EVERY SITUATION
CHILDREN
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 TAKE LESSONS FROM THEIR FAMILY MEMBERS.
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, IF A GOOD EVENT HAPPENS, THEY REALISE HOW THEY CAN ACT IN
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 STATE OR IF A BAD SITUATION HAPPENS THEY THINK ABOUT HOW THEY CAN MANAGE IT AND HOW DECREASE ITS DANGEROUS EFFECT.
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,
PARENTS
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 PREPARE THEIR DESCENDANTS FOR THE NEXT PART OF
LIFE
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SUCH
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 AS GOING TO NURSERY,PRIMARY SCHOOL,SECONDARY SCHOOL AND ENTERING HIGH SCHOOL. THESE STAGES ARE REALLY SIGNIFICANT IN EACH PERSON’S
LIFE
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.BUT, THERE IS NO DENYING THAT THERE ARE SEVERAL TYPES OF FAMILIES AND EACH OF THEM IS DIFFERENTLY CHARACTERIZED.
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, SINGLE-PARENT,EXTENDED,CLOSE-KNIT,DYSFUNCTIONAL FAMILY AND SO ON.
CHILDREN
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 WHO GROW UP IN SINGLE-PARENT FAMILY THEY OFTEN FEEL A LACK OF ONE OF THEIR
PARENTS
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 AND
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 PROBLEM SEEMS IN SOME PARTS OF THEIR FUTURE
LIFE
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 LIKE WORK,EDUCATION OR MARRIAGE
LIFE
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.IF THEY CAN’T FILL
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 GAP,IT LEADS TO BAD RESULTS.THE OTHER TYPE IS EXTENDED FAMILY WHICH ARE INVOLVED WITH STEP OR BIRTH MOTHER,FATHER,STEP OR HALF SIBLINGS,GRANDPARENTS ETC. IT
ALSO
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 AFFECT TO PERSON’S EDUCATION,BECAUSE THERE MAY GOOD OR BAD SIDE TO IT.ACTUALLY, IT DEPENDS ON THE CONNECTION BETWEEN FAMILY MEMBERS. THE THIRD KIND IS A CLOSE-KNIT FAMILY, ALL MEMBERS SUPPORT EACH OTHER WITHOUT ENQUIRIES OR QUESTIONS IN ALL SITUATIONS.IT DOES NOT MATTER IT’S EASY OR DIFFICULT. THE
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 TYPE IS DYSFUNCTIONAL FAMILY. IT’S THE DANGEROUS FOR SOCIETY.SO, THERE’S NOT ANY MANAGEMENT SYSTEM OF
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 TYPE AND
CHILDREN
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 DON’T OBEY TO RULES AND IT’S HARD FOR THEM TO ADAPT TO SOCIETY. IN CONCLUSION, I THINK WE SHOULD NOT JUDGE
PARENTS
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 FOR THEIR
CHILDREN
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.OF COURSE, SOME MANNERS OF
CHILDREN
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 AREN’T CONNECTED TOTALLY BY
PARENTS
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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