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living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause seroius social problems ,as well as practical problems .to what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In today's modern world, everyone wants to get to know about the different places of
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 globe and all
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 can be possible by learning numerous different languages.so, I am in the same mind that one has to
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 myriad obstacles
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 living in a different country.
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 with, speaking a totally opposite
language
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 can cause communication
problems
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.As the individual can not express his or her feelings to another
person
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 without speaking the common
language
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.
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, without a familiar ,
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 it can cause a
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 barrier and the
person
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 can not make new friends circle.
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, if the
person
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 is in a different country or workplace it is very hard for him to know about the environment and his co-workers without knowing their national
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 or the same
language
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 which will affect his daily life as well.
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 to
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, learning a different
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 can
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 make the
person
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 less social. Many students move to different countries for their higher education and a good quality future. They can not talk properly with their neighbours and
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 will make them lonely. As they
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 to
face
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 them on a daily basis.They have to
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 cultural and religious
problems
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 as well
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, in a foreign country people are very curious about their functions and festivals and they celebrate with their neighbours as well it will be challenging for the visitors to fit in
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. In conclusion, we can not deny the fact that people have to deal with various
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 in different countries without learning their local or national
language
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. All these
problems
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 can be solved by learning various languages

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The essay lacks depth in addressing the prompt. The discussion needs to include more detailed examples and arguments.
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The essay shows a clear introduction and conclusion. The progression of ideas needs to be more organized with strong connections between sentences and paragraphs.
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