Scientists predict that all people will choose to talk the same global language in the future. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

It is indeed true that
common
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language
help
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helps
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people
to enhance their communication with foreign
people
. I think it is a positive development. In
this
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I will discuss it from my own view.
To begin
with, a common
language
can help
people
to communicate with each other, especially when someone
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to another
country
. If anyone
do
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does
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not know the
language
they travel
, it
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might be hard
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them to take accommodation
as well as
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for
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to
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understand their culture and a lot of things about that
country
.
For example
, in China,
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material of the
peoples
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people
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are not
know
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any
language
except they are native
language
. In
this
case when a tourist
visit
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in China for travel, it is hard for them
communicate
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to communicate
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with local
people
.
On the other hand
,
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same
language
is helpful for students. It's a dream
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for toa
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toa
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a
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lot of
student
who want to study
in
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apply
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outside their
country
but some countries have a demand that if anyone wants to live or study in their
country
, they should know their native
language
. In
this
case
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many
student
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students
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cannot go to their dream
country
.
For instance
, if a
student
want
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wants
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to go
Germany
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to Germany
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for they are for their
further
study, they need to learn
German
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the German
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language
which is very hard to learn for a
student
because they already
lear
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learn
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English which is
second
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a second
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language
and 70%
people
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of people
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know that
language
. It not only affects students but
also
it can affect
businessman
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businessmen
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when they want to do business with foreign
people
so that common
language
is crucial for everyone and it would be a positive development.
To conclude
, in the recent era, many
people
are sophisticated they can use technology for their communication with foreign
people
but the same
language
is crucial for understanding their feelings and culture.
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