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People have different ways of escaping the stress and difficulties of modern life. Some read; some exercise; others work in their gardens. What do you think are the best ways of reducing stress? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

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It is commonly known that we are living in a world of new
economy
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 where the majority of
people
 have the tendency to appreciate success more than ever before.
This
 means that now the generation of
people
 will have higher
stress
 than before because they have to compete with a lot of
people
 to hit home run and I hold the notion that escaping the
stress
 and difficulties is very important. I know individuals have different ways of doing so, from my perspective, I always have 3 ways for myself to reduce
stress
. The first way is eating a favourite food because eating is part of taking care good of yourself.
Therefore
, if you can eat your favourite food when you get stressed you will feel better than before. The second way would be listening to music and watching films.
This
 is a good
stress
 reliever for myself and many other
people
. It can provide us with mental relief, lessen muscle tension and lower
stress
 hormones. What’s more, travelling,
together with
 physical activities, can act as a
stress
 reliever since when you change the location, you
also
 can change your mood
as well as
 your feelings. Of course, getting exercise
also
 can be a good
stress
 reliever but for me, I prefer travelling to new places more than. In short, I would have to say that nowadays pressure is unavoidable, so we should learn how to adapt and escape from it, not be afraid of it.
Last
 but not least, I recommend everyone should try a little bit of every tip suggested to figure out the right tracks for themselves for the sake of escaping the
stress
 and difficulties in normal life.
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