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some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Working
on
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 the same institutions throughout their
career
 journey gives you a sense of belongingness. And we cannot deny the fact that working
to
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for
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 a different
company
 will give you an edge for
career
 growth and development. First of all, working through the same organization gives
one
 a sense of belongingness.
One
 will not see her colleague as staff,
rather
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but rather
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as a
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a
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 family, because they
knew
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know
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 well each other and
its
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 gives them the loyalty that someone has their back without hesitation.
Secondly
, it
also
 provides less stress to
people
 working
on
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in
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 the same
company
 without having to worry
one
 might get bullied or backstabbed
while
 performing
one
’s duties and responsibilities.
On the other hand
, working in
different
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company
 will have a good impact on
one
’s growth and
career
 advancement.
People
 who
transferred
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 from a new environment will likely develop a new set of skills and information that will make them competitive in their chosen
career
. Say
for
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,for
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 example,
one
 learns how to multitask
while
 performing
a
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field and administrative work.
In addition
,
new
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a new
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 environment allows
one
 to learn how to manage
people
 of different
attitude
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attitudes
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 and
race
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races
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 by being flexible and culturally interactive.
Lastly
, it makes
one
to
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strive to be better and more competitive by upgrading their skills through updated seminars, and trainings making them more proactive. To sum it up, both
has
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its
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their
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 own perks of contributing
one’s
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to one’s
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 choices of
career
 moves. Regardless of which
one
 to consider,
people
 will
chose
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 to consider which makes them more active, more
stress free
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 and at the same time
enjoying
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enjoy
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 the workplace and
company
 doing their maximum potential.
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