The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004 5
The given line graph will investigate three
railway
systems
and examine how many people commute using the following transportation mode in Great Britain over a fifty-five-year period
.
We can divide the railway
system into three categories; the National rail
network
, the London
Underground and Light rail
& and metro systems
.Overall
, it is quite evident that the National rail
network
and the London
Underground remain popular options for passengers
throughout the time period
, whereas
the Light rail
& and metro systems
have remained unpopular since 1965.
Firstly
, the National rail
network
has the highest figure of 1000 million of
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apply
passengers
travelling in 1950, while
the London
underground consists of 750 million. The two railway
modes witnessed identical increases in growth and fluctuations up until the 1980s,
when Remove the comma
apply
London
's underground's growth exceeded the National Railway
's passengers
for the first time after five years. Following a decline around the 90s
, Correct your spelling
'90s
this
incremental growth has allowed London
Underground to overtake Correct article usage
the London
National
Correct article usage
the National
Railway
as the leading railway
mode for passengers
, whereas
the National Rail
network
's passengers
were roughly around the same at the beginning of the period
.
In terms of the Light rail
& metro
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and metro
systems
, it
remained relatively flat until 1980 when they experienced an increase in demand with constant growths thill the end of the Correct pronoun usage
they
period
, taking more passengers
than they initially
did at the beginning of the period
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