The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004 5

The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004 5
The given line graph will investigate three
railway
systems
and examine how many people commute using the following transportation mode in Great Britain over a fifty-five-year
period
. We can divide the
railway
system into three categories; the National
rail
network
, the
London
Underground and Light
rail
& and metro
systems
.
Overall
, it is quite evident that the National
rail
network
and the
London
Underground remain popular options for
passengers
throughout the time
period
,
whereas
the Light
rail
& and metro
systems
have remained unpopular since 1965.
Firstly
, the National
rail
network
has the highest figure of 1000 million
of
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passengers
travelling in 1950,
while
the
London
underground consists of 750 million. The two
railway
modes witnessed identical increases in growth and fluctuations up until the 1980s
,
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when
London
's underground's growth exceeded the National
Railway
's
passengers
for the first time after five years. Following a decline around the
90s
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'90s
,
this
incremental growth has allowed
London
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Underground to overtake
National
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the National
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Railway
as the leading
railway
mode for
passengers
,
whereas
the National
Rail
network
's
passengers
were roughly around the same at the beginning of the
period
. In terms of the Light
rail
&
metro
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and metro
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systems
,
it
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they
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remained relatively flat until 1980 when they experienced an increase in demand with constant growths thill the end of the
period
, taking more
passengers
than they
initially
did at the beginning of the
period
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, systems, period, rail, network, london, passengers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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