Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Quite a few individuals believe that commercials are great and successful in making us get things. Few others find it
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so common and
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it. On one hand, commercials are seen everywhere on banners , on television, on the side of the roads and
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smartphones.
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constant exposure to
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of products that are being bought by
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. Advertisement is growing to become a stable industry, thereby, manipulating the world to buy things that they promote. It has become so frequent and common that it can be seen on any social media platform. More to that, these promotions are fortunate to be victorious by attracting a lot of
people
and influencing them.
For example
, my grandfather used to have a telephone in
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2000s , until, he bought a smartphone that has made
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easier
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on the television.
As a result
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has achieved what it was intended for.
On the other hand
, because it has become so frequent
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many individuals do not pay attention to the advertising videos.
People
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are produced and created just to make the population
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invest in miscellaneous items. New subscriptions
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been discovered to watch without any advertisements. Various platforms are
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made one
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watching
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videos or films without any publicity of products.
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, various programs like Netflix,
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provide folks with movies and series on a subscription basis without any promotion.
To conclude
, in my view, the way of exhibiting items and products have both negative and positive impact. Individuals must educate themselves on what they must attain from it and learn to invest their money in something
that is
useful for them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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