The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012.

The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012.
The data provided in the form of a bar chart illustrates how many
students
moved to English-speaking countries for study in two years, 2004 and 2012,
while
the table
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compares
the foreign
students
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percentage of
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student number.
Overall
, USA and Canada were the most and least popular countries among stronger
students
over the surveyed period.
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, the tendency
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to the USA, the
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,
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Australia
and Canada
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increased
over the next 8 years. From the
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it is
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that the number of
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from other nations saw a rise in all countries compared with the population of
students
, except America. In 2004, about 180,000 immigrated to the USA
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study
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grew by 70,000 in 2012.
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, the
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of American
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over the period and stood at 2%. The UK and Australia followed the same pattern and the figure for pupils went up from 120,000 to nearly 200,000.
On the other hand
, there was an upward trend in the attendees in education systems in the UK and
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Australia in
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from other parts of the world, 4% and 5%, respectively. Canada
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was
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people in the
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for training and attracted only 60,000
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in 2012
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it
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comprised 7% of
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students
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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