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In their advertisements, business nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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 to sell more than before.
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disadvantages
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advantages
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companies
 try to use more energy in order to release a new product which
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 life easier.
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 put more
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effort
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 as there is a
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competitive atmosphere
 between organizations.
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 said that,they
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costumer
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customer
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 loyalty and introduce something with no special facility but
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 price.
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 addition,people
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 to the advertses and tend to buy products even if they don't need them at that time
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 run out of budget
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • novelty-seeking behavior
  • saturated market
  • unique value proposition
  • continual improvement
  • unnecessary consumerism
  • environmental damage
  • unrealistic expectations
  • throwaway culture
  • technological advancement
  • innovation and creativity
  • differentiate
  • foster
  • exacerbate
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