It is observed that today communication between family members in today’s times is less as compared to the past. However, some people do not think so. Do you agree or disagree?

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The issue of the growing
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of obesity in the world has become a matter of discussion for many. In my view, poor dietary choices,
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of obesity in the world has become a matter of discussion for many. In my view, poor dietary choices,
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lifestyle and
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fast
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culture are main the reasons to name
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few. In
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essay, I shall outline the main causes
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change and analyse the possible solutions. There are multiple predominant factors resulting in
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growth of the
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of obese
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and decreasing quality of health.
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, in our today's world, we live a very
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life, which leaves little to no room for cooking healthy
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at home.
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resort to eating processed or
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meals,
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is very high in both trans-saturated fat and sugar. Which is linked to many health ailments, including obesity.
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, a recent study at Stanford
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showed that most
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living in Canada on average spent
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or more sitting and doing no physical activity. That same study
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linked heart diseases and poor weight management among
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with
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type of lifestyle.
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, fast
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has now become a part of our culture and
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of
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consume it on a daily basis. A very large
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of studies show that a high
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of calories, oil and sugar present in fast
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, is the main driving force behind cardiovascular diseases, diabetes and increased body fat. So what can be done? I believe that the problem has to be tackled on a
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of levels.
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making healthy dietary choices that are low in sugar and fat, could go a long way in terms of
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fitness.
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,
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can impose new regulations to limit the amount of fructose, cholesterol and trans-saturated fat in fast
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meals. Adding to
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, it will
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be beneficial to mandate offices and companies to hire fitness and nutritional coaches, to provide guidance to those who are looking to make positive changes in their diet. In conclusion, from the given arguments and examples
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various solutions exist to mitigate
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an effort from both
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and
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. In the future, we
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only expect to see any improvement if
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we work together to eliminate the causes of
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growing global issue.

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