You want to go camping for a week with a group of friends. Write a letter to the campsite manager. In your letter • ask them to send you some information about the campsite • find out about the cost • give information about your likely arrival time
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing
this
letter about the advertisement that I saw in the local newspaper about the ‘Summer Peak’ Adventure camp.
After reading this
advertisement, my friends and I got relentlessly excited, but we had some queries. I wanted to ask you if you have any water sports like river rafting, or paddleboarding also
available for the visitors. I have a few more questions like how long the campsite is for, whether the meals provided are included in the price or not, and how far this
location is from the airport.
I am also
interested in knowing about the exact price of this
campsite. As we are 7 people in total, we require two tents for our survival approximately for a week. Moreover
, we are secondary school students, we were wondering if you offer any special discounts to scholars?
We are planning to visit in the second week of this
June as soon as our summer vacation begins at our school. We are all quite excited about this
summer trip.
My friends and I are eager to hear from you and see you soon at the campsite.
Yours sincerely,
Navneet Kaur.Submitted by ss6802125 on
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Task Achievement
Be sure to directly address the main bullet points of the task more clearly. Specifically mention that you are requesting information about the campsite, asking about the cost, and informing about your arrival time.
Coherence & Cohesion
For a more structured response, consider using headings or bullet points for each question or request. This will make your letter even more reader-friendly.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider explicitly stating your questions about the cost and arrival time in separate paragraphs to enhance clarity.
Coherence & Cohesion
The letter is well-structured, with clear paragraphs each focusing on a specific topic.
Task Achievement
You have effectively used a polite and appropriate tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for writing to a campsite manager.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
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