You want to go camping for a week with a group of friends. Write a letter to the campsite manager. In your letter • ask them to send you some information about the campsite • find out about the cost • give information about your likely arrival time

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

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letter about the advertisement that I saw in the local newspaper about the ‘Summer Peak’ Adventure camp. After reading

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advertisement, my friends and I got relentlessly excited, but we had some queries. I wanted to ask you if you have any water sports like river rafting, or paddleboarding

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available for the visitors. I have a few more questions like how long the campsite is for, whether the meals provided are included in the price or not, and how far

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location is from the airport. I am

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interested in knowing about the exact price of

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campsite. As we are 7 people in total, we require two tents for our survival approximately for a week.

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, we are secondary school students, we were wondering if you offer any special discounts to scholars? We are planning to visit in the second week of

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June as soon as our summer vacation begins at our school. We are all quite excited about

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summer trip. My friends and I are eager to hear from you and see you soon at the campsite. Yours sincerely, Navneet Kaur.

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Task Achievement

Be sure to directly address the main bullet points of the task more clearly. Specifically mention that you are requesting information about the campsite, asking about the cost, and informing about your arrival time.

Coherence & Cohesion

For a more structured response, consider using headings or bullet points for each question or request. This will make your letter even more reader-friendly.

Coherence & Cohesion

Consider explicitly stating your questions about the cost and arrival time in separate paragraphs to enhance clarity.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is well-structured, with clear paragraphs each focusing on a specific topic.

Task Achievement

You have effectively used a polite and appropriate tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for writing to a campsite manager.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

193 words

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You want to go camping for a week with a group of friends. Write a letter to the campsite manager. In your letter • ask them to send you some information about the campsite • find out about the cost • give information about your likely arrival time

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

International organizations should provide developing countries with practical aid and advice rather than financial aid.To what extent do you agree or disagree?