You need to take leave from your work of over one month of a period for personal reasons. Write a letter to your boss. In your letter · Explain the reason for the leave and the length of leave you need · Explain how you will keep up-to-date while you’re away · Suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

Dear Mr. Brown, I hope
this
letter finds you well. I'
m
Ramita
as
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a
heard
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marketing manager. I'
m
writing
this
letter to inform you that I need to take a vacation about over one month
with
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my
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personal reasons. As you know, I never
take to leave
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a job before. I always
attent
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full time of my career. Because I'
m
a head manager. The reason that I need to take a vacation is
too
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stress.
Moreover
, I would like you to give me around 1 month and 2 weeks for leaving.
Furthermore
, I will always follow up
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job from my team. I might
to
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keep in
a
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contact with Sarah. She is one of the marketing team.
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, If they
are
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do not understand
about
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the job. They can contact me
while
having work time. As I
expain
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explain
explained
before, I will keep in
a
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contact with Sarah. She will always tell me about the problem and issue. I think I could
be covered
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the work
while
. I'
m
leaving. Please let me know if you would like more information. Yours faithfully, Ramita Panprayoon
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coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas in a more logical and coherent manner. Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea. Your greeting and closing could be more formal and appropriate for a letter to your boss.
task response
Ensure that your response fully addresses the task requirements and maintains a suitable formal tone throughout the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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