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It is better for students to study from home rather than go to school. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#students #study #home #school
In
state-of-the-art
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a state-of-the-art
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 society , individuals believe that studying at
school
 has numerous benefits
while
 others tend to
interested
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be interested
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 in studying online . In
this
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learn
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learning
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 at
school
due to
 relationships and real
knowledge
 Going to
school
instead
 of studying online will provide some benefits for
students
.
First,
they can learn the lesson directly which could help the
students
 gain
knowledge
 and skills more easily. Indeed, going to
school
that
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help
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 children find the lesson more interesting and helpful
instead
 of studying it from home.
Moreover
, going to
school
 could help them keep in touch with their classmate and
also
 they can discuss the lesson or the homework easily which will lead to interesting and
appealling
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appealing
class
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classes
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.
Therefore
, children may make
a
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plenty of new friends and
also
 the number of
students
 who are
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 and antisocial will fall
down
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in the next few years.
In other words
, the teachers would find more
easy
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easier
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 to control the number of
scholar
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scholars
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. Perhaps, they can take
roll-call
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 in order to know who
have
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 been accessing the course.
Furthermore
, they could follow the level of
knowledge
 of their student, so they can give them
a
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apply
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long-tern
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long-term
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 progress which will improve their level and
also
 help them get a high mark in the next exam. What’s
more
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 there will be some
students
are
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who are
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 lazy
who
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and
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 tell
a lies
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lies
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with
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 their teachers when learning online. Indeed, correspondence lessons will acquire some
problem
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problems
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such
 as the internet eruption which will
be
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 hard for scholars to follow the lessons.
To sum up
, there are many benefits when learning online
such
 as gaining
knowledge
 and skills easily and so on. I would
agrue
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argue
agree
 that going to
school
 is the best alternative for
who
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those who
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 want to get a good job in the future.
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