The pie charts give information about how much money collected and spent for children’s charity in one year in USA.

The pie charts give information about how much money collected and spent for children’s charity in one year in USA.
The pie charts give information about how much
money
was collected and spent on children’s
charity
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in one year in the USA. First of all, the total amount of
money
that was collected
equal
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to $53,561,580 and the total
money
spent
equal
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to $53,224,896 and approximately $437 remained. Donated food was one of the main sources of
money
donation (86.6%). The second main
money
donation was community contributions (10.4%).
While
, other sources
such
as
program
revenue, investment income, government grants, and other income were only 3%.
On the other hand
, the expenditures included
program
services
, fundraising, and management and general
services
. The greatest amount (95.8%) of donated
money
was spent on children's
program
services
.
In addition
, 2.6% of the total
money
was used for fundraising
services
.
Further
, 1.6% was spent on management and general
services
.
Overall
, the highest amount
for
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collection of
money
was Donated food,
while
most of
the
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them
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was spent on children's
program
services
.
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