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Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that governments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A school of thought claims that everybody should be entitled to free higher
education
 regardless of their financial condition.
While
this
 thinking is valid to a certain extent, I am convinced that abolishing college tuition is not a good idea. On the one hand, it is understandable why some people advocate waiving university
fee
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. The key rationale is that
this
 will help more
students
, especially those who come from disadvantaged backgrounds, to pursue tertiary
education
.
As a result
, they could stand a better chance of landing higher-paid jobs and bettering their quality of life.
However
,
this
 thinking is flawed, as the
labor
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 market is already competitive.
Therefore
, a surge in graduates means they will struggle more to seek employment. It could be said that wholly subsidizing college
education
 is counter-productive to job guarantee. Another pronounced drawback is that the provision of free-of-charge tertiary
education
 may have an on
students
' academic results. As most undergraduates today have to pay for their
education
, they are inclined to study in earnest and apply themselves to getting good grades.
Therefore
, if
this
 financial obligation was distributed,
students
 could be indifferent to their studies and lose the motivation to work hard. As an example, they may skip classes or miss exams since they think that failing does not cost them anything. These
behaviors
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 clearly may result in deteriorating performance and
students
 would not benefit from their
education
.
To conclude
, I believe that allotting state funding to make universities free of charge does not seem to be a good idea.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Higher education
  • Accessibility
  • Social mobility
  • Meritocracy
  • Economic growth
  • Equality
  • Subsidize
  • Fiscal sustainability
  • Human capital
  • Incentivize
  • Underfunded
  • Tuition fees
  • Academic achievement
  • Workforce
  • Tax burden
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