Prevention is better than cure".Out of country's health budget,a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on preventive measures. To what extend do you agree?
Many
people
believe that ways to implement preventive measure Use synonyms
is
more effective and Change the verb form
are
cost efficient
than Add a hyphen
cost-efficient
total
cure Correct article usage
a total
to
a disease. I totally agree because money spent well on ways to reduce the worsening of a disease will Change preposition
for
bring
a big impact on Verb problem
have
ones
life and Change to a genitive case
one's
also
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in
the community.
First of all, Change preposition
on
government
should Add an article
the government
alot
more budget on early diagnostic Correct your spelling
a lot
allot
equipments
that can come in handy. In Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
this
way, Linking Words
people
will learn how to detect certain signs and symptoms by the use of machines like Use synonyms
Correct article usage
a sphymomanometer
sphymomanometer
and pulse oximeter, which will give them an idea that Correct your spelling
sphygmomanometer
sphygmomanometers
a
disease is starting to arise and soon to progress if they see any abnormalities in the results. Remove the article
apply
Moreover
, when Linking Words
people
learn to use these machines, they will become more Use synonyms
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health consious
and more proactive in Correct your spelling
health-conscious
maintaning
their Correct your spelling
maintaining
health
.
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In addition
, Linking Words
health
nationals should Use synonyms
focused
Change the verb form
be focused
focus
in
diverting funds to promote early awareness among Change preposition
on
people
through active Use synonyms
advertisments
by using radios and televisions on common Correct your spelling
advertisements
health
diseases. By doing Use synonyms
this
, Linking Words
people
will be reminded of how a certain Use synonyms
diseases
looks like , when it will commonly appear Change the noun form
disease
on
Change preposition
in
a
certain seasons of the year and how to manage it. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
Moreover
, Linking Words
people
will most likely develop a sense of responsibility by the knowledge they learn from these thereby maintaining a healthy lifestyle.
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Lastly
, Linking Words
health
officials should help more Use synonyms
on
allocating Change preposition
with
budget
to different Fix the agreement mistake
budgets
health
sectors in order for them to be made more Use synonyms
accesible
and more practical to many folks. On the brighter side, when laboratory test and vaccines Correct your spelling
accessible
is
made available for all Change the verb form
are
people
including the less fortunate, Use synonyms
people
will Use synonyms
less
likely to incur communicable diseases like COVID and pneumonia thereby promoting Add a missing verb
be less
a
healthy Correct article usage
apply
people
in the community.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that taking preventive measures is not only practical but Use synonyms
also
promotes Linking Words
a
social responsibility to oneself and to other Remove the article
apply
people
, Use synonyms
as well as
by taking simple steps in order to keep Linking Words
onself
fit rather than paying for an expensive regret.Correct your spelling
oneself
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