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People in big cities are facing many health challenges due to a high level of air pollution. What causes air pollution in big cities? Can you suggest some ways to deal with this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In contemporary society,
air
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pollution
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 has been one of the biggest issues to concern. As more and more people have to face it
everyday
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, we need to have awareness and how to deal with it as soon as possible. There are plenty of reasons that cause
air
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pollution
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 in big cities.
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, there are a lot of productive factories in big cities with large emission fuels that cause
air
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pollution
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.
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, it
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 comes from
our
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 vehicles that we drive
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,
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 because people are using vehicles too much so it will release a lot of CO2 that makes the
air
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pollution
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 worse.
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, we cannot let
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air
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pollution
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 keep going on because it will impact a lot on our health.
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, we need to find a solution to protect our environment.
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, using
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 vehicles that release CO2,
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,
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 public transportation will decrease
air
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pollution
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. In conclusion,
air
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pollution
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 is a crucial problem in our society.
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, we need to prevent it and find
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 solution to solve the problem as quickly as we can because of our earth and our health.
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