Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the current 246
bus
services. My name is Kate Okada and I am a student at Victoria
college
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College
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. I have been using 246
buses
from Brighton to the city centre to go to
the
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school on weekdays for almost two years.
Although
the 246
bus
service used to have four
buses
per hour, it was suddenly reduced to only two
buses
without any notifications
last
month. When I phoned the customer service department, I was told that your company had to decide to reduce
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the numbers
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numbers
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of
this
service in order to save
labor
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costs.
However
, I believe
this
situation has been affecting not only me but
also
the other passengers who rely on the same
bus
route. In fact, a few other people and I could not even get on the
bus
at 7.15am from Brighton
last
friday
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Friday
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as the
bus
was already fully packed when it arrived there. I would,
therefore
, like to request that your company
operates
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buses
with the previous time schedule again for passengers' needs and safety. If you could consider and proceed with my request immediately, I would really appreciate it. Please contact me anytime if you need any
further
information. Thank you very much. Yours faithfully, Kate Okada
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