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Fast food is becoming one part of life. Everywhere this has had effect on our lifestyle and diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#food #part #life #effect #lifestyle #diet
Consumption of
junky
food
 became a norm
of
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for
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 every human being, which brings more hazardous consequences
on
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to
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 their daily
routing
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routine
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 and
meals
. I strongly agree
for
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this
 statement because
avoid
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avoiding
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 practising cooking methods,
as well as
 apart from taking healthy
meals
 are common issues can be seen and
it
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would
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will
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 elaborate
profoundly
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on profoundly
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 through
this
 essay.
To begin
 with,
reluctant
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being reluctant
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 to prepare
own
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your own
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meal
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meals
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 at home is a trend these days.
Although
 people had busy lives in the past age, they tended to arrange their
meals
 because healthy
and
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unless
having
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they had
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 alternatives.
However
, after fast-
food
 became popular the majority willing to use
them
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it
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 as they
are
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were
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 able to save
their
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time and
spent
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spend
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 on
another activities
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another activity
other activities
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, which
help
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helped
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 to change their lives,
such
 as travelling and learning
as
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apply
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that
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apply
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.
For example
, ordering rice and
instance
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instant
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noodle
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noodles
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 are being done often by my friends as they want to have extra time, which is
thy
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usually spent on cooking, for their education.
Hence
, those
junky
food
have
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 impacted strongly to alter the lives of
public
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the public
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.
Furthermore
,
hesitate
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the hesitation
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 to have nutritious
meals
also
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is also
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outcome
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the outcome
an outcome
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 of the instant
meals
. To
precise
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be precise
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,
with
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the community have been consuming
junky
 item for
long
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the long
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 run,
leads
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which leads
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 to
avoid
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avoiding
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 from
balance
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balanced
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 diet, which is caused enormous life – related disorders
such
 as
Diabetis
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diabetes
, Heart diseases
as
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and
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 that. Because taking
nutritional
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a nutritional
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 diet
consume
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 considerable time to prepare, which is
people
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what people
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 dislike the most.
Nevertheless
, if someone
prefer
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 to utilize conventional
food
, would enhance
own
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their own
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 health condition, which is paramount for life.
For instance
, from my experience as a nurse,
considerable
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a considerable
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 proportion of people, who
came
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come
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 to get medicines
are
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suffered from
Diabetis
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diabetes
 because of excessive usage of
backery
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bakery
 items on
regular
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a regular
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 basis.
Thus
, traditional diet habit is influenced by
junky
food
in
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apply
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presently.
To conclude
,
according to
 the above clarification, these particular foods have made
huge
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a huge
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 impact on
life style
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lifestyle
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 and eating
habit
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habits
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 of the society
such
 as
,
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beingavoided
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being avoided
 arranging own
meals
 and
reluctant
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being reluctant
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 to take
food
 with nutritional value.
Hence
, I thoroughly agree
for
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with
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this
 phenomenon.
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