Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Other think there are more effective methods. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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are becoming to look after for
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problems and to prevent
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from going to the
gym
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whereas
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people
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gym
but
also
have
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a variety
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ways
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of ways
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to do
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. In my opinion, do
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exercise
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which can
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every where
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as long as determination
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beside
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It can not denied that
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a gymnasium
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where
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individuals can practise some
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workout
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lessons may be they
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not give upon soon. At the
gym
, the ample trainers to support and encourage
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motivation
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.
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, throughout the course of losing weight
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each
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regularly different to fit up with
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. The trainers can understand both students and their
body
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bodies
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to make a suitable lecture.
Nevertheless
, some
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people
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person
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people
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can not
affort
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afford
numerous extravagant
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costs
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cost
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costs
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so
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a drawback
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drawback
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a drawback
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of
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the gym
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gym
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the gym
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.
On the other hand
, it is not
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choice to make
theirself
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themselves
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better. Many
people
will change or at least alter their
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field in all life
may
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be to refresh themselves. Even those who
can
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feel
the
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that
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fitness
should
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not
suitable
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a suitable
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choice for them. Meanwhile,
world
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has constantly changed annual years
why
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so
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people
must opt
the
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lesson fitness they don't like. Even if mental
health
is one of the factorial main require relaxation , recollection of mind to be immersed in nature
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a
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athele
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athlete
perso
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person
hold
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theirself
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themselves
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accountable.
To conclude
, mental
health
and
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body can be affected by
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle. In order that staying active all day to get
a
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disease prevention and hit the
guym
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gym
is not
convinient
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convenient
for all
people
.
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  • Physical well-being
  • prime option
  • structured exercise routines
  • professional equipment
  • fostering an environment
  • motivation and discipline
  • counter-argument
  • outdoor activities
  • home workouts
  • cost-effectiveness
  • social and emotional satisfaction
  • team sports
  • hybrid approach
  • holistic approach
  • comprehensive benefits
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