The given lie graph illustrate the amount of partiipants in 4 kinds of sports in particular inhabitant from 1985 to 2005.

The given lie graph illustrate the amount of partiipants in 4 kinds of sports in particular inhabitant from 1985 to 2005.
The given line graph
illustrate
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the
amount
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number
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of
participants
in 4 kinds of sports
in particular
inhabitant from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
, badminton and rugby experienced a downward trend and tennis’s
participants
has
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had
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a quick increase over the period,
while
basketball
maintain
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maintained
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the
participants
rate.
Additionally
,
at
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in
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the beginning, rugby
has
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had
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the most choices
of
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for
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people
, but it
was
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has been
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repalced
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replaced
by tennis since 1995. With regard to the two sports which show
decrease
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a decrease
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in
participants
, both badminton and
rubgy
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rugby
were at roughly 55
people
and 250
people
, respectively. In terms of badminton, it
decline
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declined
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after beginning to 45
people
,
however
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,however
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it varied to rise to 50
people
and continued to
levelled-off
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levelled off
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to
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by
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the year
of
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2005.
Likewise
,
rubgy’s
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rugby’s
participants
,
although
started with the most
of
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people
, it declined quickly and
steady
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steadily
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over the entire
of
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period
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the period
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from 250 to 50
people
in the
last
year. Turning toward
to
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the basketball sport that fluctuated in the first 15 years old and reached a peak of 100
participants
in 2000, after which it decreased slowly to under 100
participants
in 2005. As for
the
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tennis sport, it stood at 150
people
at the beginning before rising significantly and exceeded rugby at 200
people
in 1995, it continued to increase to approximately 225
people
in 2005,
become
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becoming
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the sport
has
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that has
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the most
participants
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words participants, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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