The graph below shows the changes in production (millions) of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the changes in production (millions) of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The line graph
compare
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compares
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the trend in the production of
suit
, coat and
dress
in clothing factory between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, as we can
be seen
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see
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that
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apply
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the coats steadily rose during
this
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these
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years, and the
dress
occupided
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occupied
occupies
the lowest one
in
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at
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the end
of
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apply
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. In 1990, the
suit
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suits
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were most popular in the clothing plant, which produced around 15
million
.
By contrast
, the
figure
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figures
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for coats and
dress
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dresses
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have only reached about
7million
Correct your spelling
7 million
and
mere10million
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a mere 10 million
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.
However
this
changed a year later, coat
shaprly
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sharply
shapely
rose and consistently that it overtook
dress
in 1995 at approximately 13
million
and
of
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apply
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suit
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the suit
a suit
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in 2001 at around 17
million
. In 2010,
coat
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Coat
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overtook
suit
as top sales gainer at 25
million
. The production of suits
fluctuate
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fluctuated
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sharply during the period shown, once peaking at around 22
million
in 1995, next year the figure declined until 2005. After
that
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,that
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they
increament
Correct your spelling
increased
again
reached
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and reached
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close to 20
million
. At
same
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the same
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time,
this
situition
Correct your spelling
situation
also
be
ovservied
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observed
in
dress
, but in general, the figure increased and stood at 15
million
in 2010.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words suit, dress, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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