More and more qualified people are moving from oiir ti rucg ciybtrues ti fukk vacabcues in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countires are stealing from poor countries. Ohters feel that this is only part of the natural movement of worker around the world. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

These days, the figure of professionals in developing
countries
move
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to developed ones increases rapidly. Most
people
think that rich
countries
attract human resources from poor
countries
by encouraging the movement of workers
while
others assume that
this
is only a natural phenomenon in the world.
This
essay will discuss both sides of
this
statement and represent my opinion about
this
issue.
To begin
with, there are many attractive conditions to find jobs with high
salary
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salaries
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in rich
countries
.
For instance
, as a business accountant, my aunt found a job in VN 3 years ago
then
she moved to America to find another attractive chance. When she worked in VN, she earned only $1000 per month
whereas
the amount of salaries in
US
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is three times as much as in
home
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her home
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country. That’s why she decided to change
working
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environment
.
On the other hand
, some
people
feel that
movement
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the movement
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of
people
from poor to rich
countries
depends on many reasons. Apart from occupations, living
environment
,
such
as weather,
environment
and living standards, are
also
the most important
element
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elements
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for them to decide
moving
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to other
countries
.
For example
, the
environment
in Africa is seriously polluted by the death of
millions
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people
staving
everyday
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.
Therefore
,
African
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Africans
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has
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have
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to leave their country to protect themselves
out of
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from
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this
polluted atmosphere. In brief, I agree that most
people
from poor
countries
tend to find jobs in richer
countries
.
However
, I think that once rich
countries
steal
the
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substantial number of qualified
people
to fill spaces in specialist areas from
home
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their home
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countries
, it is logical for them to compensate for
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the professionals
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professionals
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shortage in these places by affording financial.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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