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The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph gives data about the number of
hours
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 of teachers for 3 types of
schools
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 in the USA,
Spain
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, Iceland and
Japan
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 in 2001.
Overall
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, It is an obvious fact that the USA was the first place for all three
schools
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while
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Japan
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,
Spain
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 and Iceland were equal to one another for primary
schools
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.
According to
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 the graph, the ratios of
hours
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 were 600 both at primary and secondary
schools
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 in
Japan
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.
Also
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, these ratios were the same in
Spain
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. Teaching
hours
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 for upper secondary
schools
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 sections were about 620 in
Japan
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while
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this
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 rate was equal to 1000 in
Spain
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.
Moreover
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, the number of
hours
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 of educators at secondary and upper secondary was 800 ,
however
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, the rate of
hours
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 at primary
schools
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 was lower by 200 than in these sections in Iceland.
Furthermore
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, the number of primary
schools
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 was the first place with about 880 in the USA. Turning
hours
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 at secondary and upper secondary
schools
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, the former was roughly 1020 and the latter approximately 1080
hours
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, schools, spain, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratios" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual hours of teaching
  • teaching workload
  • educational systems
  • teacher-student ratio
  • significantly
  • slightly
  • noticeably
  • gap
  • highest/lowest number of hours
  • compare
  • contrast
  • reflect
  • variations
  • distribution of teaching hours
  • average
  • respectively
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