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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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this
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This
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 table illustrates the changes
of
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in
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people
 who went for international travel from 1990 to 2005.
in
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In
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this
 table, the data shows that as
the
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apply
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time
passes
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passed
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, more
people
 travelled internationally i.e., in 1990, around 448.9
million
people
 travelled internationally
while
 in 2005, around 693.7
million
people
.
secondly
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Secondly
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, the table
also
 provided the travelling history specific to different places.
in
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In
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 1990, around 18.2
million
people
 travelled but in 2005, around 28.7
million
people
 travelled there.
additionally
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, around 80.5
million
people
 travelled
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to amercia
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amercia
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America
 in 1990 but in 2005, 113.2
million
people
 travelled
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to america
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america
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America
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.
moreover
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Moreover
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,
number
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a number
the number
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 of
people
 who travelled
asia
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Asia
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 and
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the pacific
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pacific
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Pacific
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,
europe
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Europe
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 and
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the middle
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middle east
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Middle East
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also
increases
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increased
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.
in
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In
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 conclusion, most of the
people
 who travelled internationally in
this
 era i.e.,
1990
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from 1990
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 to 2005 went to
europe
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Europe
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.
it
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It
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 can be because of the liberal culture
and
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apply
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political
stablity
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stability
 and better economy which can offer better opportunities to the
people
 in
europe
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Europe
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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