The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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this
table illustrates the changes Capitalize word
This
of
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in
people
who went for international travel from 1990 to 2005. Use synonyms
in
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In
this
table, the data shows that as Linking Words
the
time Correct article usage
apply
passes
, more Wrong verb form
passed
people
travelled internationally i.e., in 1990, around 448.9 Use synonyms
million
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people
travelled internationally Use synonyms
while
in 2005, around 693.7 Linking Words
million
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people
.
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secondly
, the table Capitalize word
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also
provided the travelling history specific to different places. Linking Words
in
1990, around 18.2 Capitalize word
In
million
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people
travelled but in 2005, around 28.7 Use synonyms
million
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people
travelled there.
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additionally
, around 80.5 Capitalize word
Additionally
million
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people
travelled Use synonyms
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to amercia
amercia
in 1990 but in 2005, 113.2 Correct your spelling
America
million
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people
travelled Use synonyms
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to america
america
.
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America
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moreover
, Capitalize word
Moreover
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
people
who travelled Use synonyms
asia
and Change the capitalization
Asia
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the pacific
pacific
, Capitalize word
Pacific
europe
and Change the capitalization
Europe
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the middle
middle east
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Middle East
also
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increases
.
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increased
in
conclusion, most of the Capitalize word
In
people
who travelled internationally in Use synonyms
this
era i.e., Linking Words
1990
to 2005 went to Change preposition
from 1990
europe
. Change the capitalization
Europe
it
can be because of the liberal culture Capitalize word
It
and
political Correct word choice
apply
stablity
and better economy which can offer better opportunities to the Correct your spelling
stability
people
in Use synonyms
europe
.Change the capitalization
Europe
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