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Some people believe that children should stay in school until the age of 18. Others suggest that educating till the age of 14 year is enough. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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Some people argue that children's
education
 is necessary until the
age
 of 14,
while
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others are of the opinion that academic
education
 must be a force for younger 18 years old
adolecsents
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adolescents
. I personally believe that students should complete their school and get their diploma before the legal
age
 and after
that
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 they can choose to stop or continue their
education
. On one hand, supporters of finishing school
in
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 14 years old have their own reasons.
Firstly
,
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contomperory
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contemporary
 society
have
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 faced
with
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the
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a
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 lack of
labor
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 forces. Most of the pupils are
continueing
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continuing
 their
education
 and would become an engineer or
doctor
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doctors
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 in their
future
carrier
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careers
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.
For instance
, in developing countries
such
 as India and Iran, most
of
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parents register their children in
some
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high-quality private
institues
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institutes
 to force them to become
a
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successful
surgeon
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surgeons
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 or an
architect engineer
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 in the
future
. In these
reigons
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regions
, the younger generations cannot follow their dream
carriers
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careers
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 and
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society
would
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 face some complications in the
future
,
such
 as
lack
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 of professional artists, musicians or even a person who have the ability to fix mechanical things professionally.
On the other hand
, I think that younger generations should complete their
schools
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 and
then
 follow their desires and interests.
For instance
, providing that students leave the academic environment
in
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 the
age
 of 14, the percentage of their success will be significantly decreased. Teenagers do not have enough life experiences
in
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 the
age
 of 14, so they might allocate their worthy
times
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 to
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 out with the wrong individuals, who suffer from drug and
alchohol
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alcohol
 addiction.
Therefore
, they might face some unpredictable complications, which would lead them not only to a dark
future
,
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 but
also
 to a hard and problematic one. In
conlusion
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conclusion
,
although
 some groups of individuals think that
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14 years old is an appropriate
age
 for leaving
schools
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school
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, I believe that teenagers must follow the academic world
atleast
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at least
 until the
age
 of 18. If students leave their schools soon, they will face numerous unpredictable obstacles.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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