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In many countries, people like to eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do the disadvantages of this trend outweigh its advantages?

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Some
people
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 believe the food production that takes place in foreign
countries
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 can benefit the spread of the national
culture
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,
such
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 as omakase in Japan;
however
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, the main reason why many
people
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 do not agree with
this
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 is international edibles cost amount of budgets. From my point of view, I think the advantages outweigh the drawbacks because when the
culture
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 spreads, it will raise foreign tourism. There are many
people
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 who agree to purchase international
foods
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, which they
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 receive the traditional
culture
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 from other
countries
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.
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, there is a significant increase in the trend to eat omakase from Japan, which they can easily find in Japanese restaurants. During meal time, the chefs can perform their skills to promote each food.
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, the productional
countries
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 can produce income continuously, and
this
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 is the way to make the national
culture
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 spread out on a global scale.
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,
this
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 development
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 creates the disadvantage that the prices of each dish are not affordable because the ingredients are hard to find.
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,
this
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 does not include the transportation tax and the chef,
then
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 combine all these things the final price is increased by just over 10,000 baht.
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, many
people
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 refuse to eat these
foods
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 staff since these things
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 the money in their pocket. In conclusion,
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 the unique cultures of different
countries
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 are spread via international
foods
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, each time that
people
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 eat these staff, it costs a lot of money. In my opinion, I think the advantage is considered more weight since I just explained only one advantage.
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, When
people
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 try international food, they already know that these
foods
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 are modified for the target country's tongue, which makes them want to test the original ones.

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