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the chart shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.

the chart shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.
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The given bar chart compares the
amount
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 of export incomes in 5 categories between 2015 and 2016.
Additionally
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, the table illustrates the changes in the value of each category in that period of time.
As
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 an
overall
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 perspective,
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 the highest proportion of export earnings belonged to petroleum and engineered goods, textiles exports carried the lowest money during 2015 and 2016.
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 and
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 the table, textile and agricultural products experienced the most and the least changes in
its
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their
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 exportation
amount
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 respectively. As
it
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apply
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is obvious from the chart, petroleum products, engineered goods, agricultural commodities, and textiles witnessed an increase in their
amount
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 from 2015 to 2016.(approximately 61 to 64,58 to 62,31 to 32, and 25 to 32 billion respectively.
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 to named ones, germs and jewellery saw a fall from
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 45 to 41 billion in that time. In order to the changes in the value of categories
amount
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 of exports,
instead
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 of germs and jewellery which decreased by 5.18%, the rest of them increased by 3%, 8.5%, 0.81%, and 15.24% .(respectively petroleum products, engineered goods, agricultural commodities, and textiles)
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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