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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of 3 metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of 3 metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (
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The line chart gives information about the change in monthly
prices
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 for
copper
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,
nickel
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 and
zinc
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 over the course of 2014.
Overall
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, there were declines
for
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 the
prices
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 of
copper
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 and especially
nickel
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, and a moderate rise
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zinc
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. By the end of the period, the changes had become less extreme and
nickel
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 clearly experienced the greatest month-to-month volatility. In January
of
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2014, the percentage change for
nickel
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 based on the previous month was 6%, by far higher than
copper
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 (2%) and
zinc
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 (1%).
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 trend reversed for
nickel
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 with the percentage changes dropping to 1% by March and a low of -3% by June. The divergences for the other minerals were more moderate with a high of a 3% change for
zinc
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 in February before a declining trend over the remainder of the first half of the
year
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.
Copper
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prices
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similarly
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 fell but were grouped slightly lower around 1% to -1%. In the second half of the
year
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,
nickel
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 production declined (-1% over most months) before a sharp rise to finish the
year
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1
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%
increases
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.
Copper
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,
in contrast
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, hovered near 1% from July onwards with a slight uptick in December.
Zinc
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 was marginally lower with .5% drops for the majority of the latter part of the
year
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, prior to a surge to finish with a 2% rise in December, the highest ending point among all mineral
prices
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, copper, nickel, zinc, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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