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In some countries more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reason for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Exercise
 plays a key role in human health and wellness and to keep yourself fit, it is very necessary to be active and do
exercise
 or participate in
sports
. I will elucidate my point of view in support of doing
exercise
 and playing
sports
 in the following essay.
To begin
 with, nowadays every other person is having some health issues and most of them are
due to
 their sedentary lifestyle
thus
 it is very important to be active in their daily
life
 routine and do
exercise
.
For instance
, a diabetic or a stroke patient`s upcoming
life
 is dependent on their lifestyle If they are active and doing enough
exercise
 they will live longer and better lives.
Additionally
, if they lead a sedentary
life
then
 their
life
 span will reduce to half and lower the quality of
life
.
On the contrary
, some people like to hire a fitness
trainer
 for them because they want to do everything calculated and tested but hiring a fitness
trainer
 is not in everybody`s budget because a professional
trainer
 requires a good amount of money for their services and plans and everybody cannot afford it
therefore
, most of the people who knows the value of active
life
 prefer to do the
exercise
 and participate in the
sports
 games.
To sum up
, I personally recommend doing exercises and participating in
sports
 so one can remain healthy in a budget-friendly manner and can lead a beautiful
life
 with their family but to hire a professional
trainer
 is
also
 not wrong so one who afford can go with the
trainer
 as well.
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