The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main fitures and make comparisons where relevant

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The diagram gives data about the alterations of West Park Secondary School from its first condition in 1950 to the latest condition in 2010.

Overall

, It is an obvious fact that the playground and the main road were retained

while

some buildings were constructed over three various years.

According to

the diagram, in comparison between 1950 and 1980, the most eye-catching change was that houses were taken down to build a car park area and the science block of the school building.

Moreover

, in 1980, another striking modification was the sports field that was constructed

instead

of farmland next to the playground. In 1980, the main road

was

Verb problem

had

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not undergone any process.

In addition

, a comparison between 1980 and 2010 years was taken into consideration, the most eye-catching modification was car park area was enlarged

while

the sports field was diminished.

Furthermore

, the main road, the playground field, the buildings of the school and the science block were retained in 2010 too.

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162 words

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The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main fitures and make comparisons where relevant

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