You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of your homestay host family. Write your first letter to the family. In your letter introduce yourself ask the family some questions to get information that is important to you tell the family about your arrival date and time
Dear Mrs and Mr. Williams, My name is Ravshanova Mushtariy and I live in a small city in Uzbekistan. I'
m
thrilled to be joining you for the "English and Homestay"program in New Zealand. I'm
currently working in a well-known company, and I'm
looking forward to this
opportunity to improve my English skills and experience life in a new country that I've never been to.
Also
, I have a few questions to get settled in. Could you please let me know about the daily routine in your home, including mealtime and also
the house rules I should be aware of? Also
, I would love to know the area you live in. Are there any cinemas, amusement parks, and malls?
Also
, could you let me know anything about clothing in New Zealand? Therefore
, I would love to know about what people wear in the area where you live, and also
I can't wait to try traditional dishes.
I'll be arriving on August 11, at 4 p.m
. Please let me know if I should bring anything specific you would like me to bring from my country. I'm
looking forward to meeting you all. See you all soon
Best regards,
Ravshanova MushtariySubmitted by omondavlat91 on
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coherence cohesion
Your letter is generally clear and well-structured, but you could enhance coherence by making sure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next.
task achievement
You addressed all the points required, but you might benefit from adding more specific questions to give a fuller picture of your needs and interests.
suitable writing tone
You used a polite and warm tone throughout the letter, which is very suitable for a first correspondence with your host family.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are courteous and appropriate.
complete response
You managed to address multiple points in the task effectively, showing strong awareness of the task requirements.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite