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In order to study at university, students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extend do you agree?

#study #university #students #tuition #fees #people #education
In these
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 days, the demand
of
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for
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 studying
in
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at
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university is increasing dramatically because of chances for job seeking for
post-graduated
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students
.
It is
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thought
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 that post-school
education
 fees should be paid by
government
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the government
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while
 others say that
students
 have to pay by themselves. Personally, I believe that
students
 should pay for
themselves
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the fees of
high
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education
. Granted, one might argue that
abandon
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 of high
education
 fees could encourage young people to take part in university in order to have degrees, leading to higher chances of employment for these people.
In addition
, by providing
such
 free courses,
students
 who have financial problems could
remain
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 their study progress.
However
,
due to
 free
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tuition
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tuitions
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tuition
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for
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of
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for
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 higher
education
,
students
 would have less responsibility for their learning process because they will have nothing to lose if they do not finish their courses.
Moreover
,
government
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the government
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 could grant scholarships for
students
 who have financial issues,
therefore
 it could enhance the encouragement
of
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learning spirit.
Furthermore
,
instead
 of giving free higher
education
,
government
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the government
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 could save money to make a free school program to ensure that all the communities in
country
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the country
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 have qualified the tertiary
education
.
Additionally
,
government
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the government
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 could support
the
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vocational secondary schools in order to help people who
have
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lack
of
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literacy skills but
good
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are good
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 at career skills.
For example
, individuals who have no probability
to learn
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of learning
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 math or literature but might have ingenuous hands could improve their feasibility
to
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of
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be
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the
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professional workers in construction areas
such
 as welders, builders, and masons.
Thus
, it helps them to have chances to get good jobs in the future and devote
to
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themselves to
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 the development of society. In conclusion,
while
 some say that free
for
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university
education
 could encourage individuals to improve their
education
 and
it
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positively impact
on
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society
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 development, I myself believe that
such
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