A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems might these differences cause? How might these problems be reduced?

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Some
people
believe that the increasing living standard in a nation brings more advantages to urban than countryside.
This
phenomenon brings many challenges, which can be tackled by the implementation of appropriate strategies and policies. Obviously, when the standard of living has grown in big cities, many
people
flock to these
cites
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cities
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that
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cause
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causing
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the
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overload situation in many fields
such
as economy, education and health.
Due to
the lack of
labor
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labour
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forces in the rural areas, there is a decrease in the number of agricultural outputs that
threaten
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the entire population's food supply chain
as well as
the
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impact on the economy's nation.
Besides
, overcrowding
also
affects the quality of life
due to
serious air, water and environmental pollution. These harmful problems can affect
people
's health
while
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the healthcare system, doctors and nurses are not enough to serve many
people
at the same time.
However
, in order to solve these challenges, the government should have appropriate strategies and policies. First of all, the local authorities should properly allocate the budget to upgrade the
infrastructures
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infrastructure
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in the rural areas
such
as the roads and the measure of
transports
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transport
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to attract investors and create job opportunities.
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, building
the
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bridges in the Mekong
delta
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in Vietnam has shortened the shipping time of goods to other areas.
Secondly
, providing professional knowledge about many undeveloped fields in the countryside
such
as marketing or design to connect and
the
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even
growth
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. These improvements not only keep local
people
stay
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in their
hometown
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hometowns
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but
also
make the countryside
become
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a place worth living
.
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Although
uneven development is unavoidable, the allocation of financial resources and reasonable development plans for each area may decrease the disparity in population.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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