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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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No one will purchase printed newsletters or
books
 in the future because everything will be available for them to read online without charge.
This
 can decrease the cost of manufacturing
newspapers
 and the amount of paper usage. The outcomes are certainly approved since they can reduce the effects of global warming and it is easier to find information on the internet.
Newspapers
 and
books
 are usually made of paper, which is derived from wood. There is a lot of deforestation taking place in order to accumulate
woods
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wood
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 and convert
them
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it
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 to
papers
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paper
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. These steps require a lot of
fundings
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funding
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 and are harmful to the environment.
Nevertheless
, publishing a news article or electronic
books
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book
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 online only
take
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takes
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 a few minutes and it does not include natural resources. More trees are left in the forest
this
 way, making the air healthy to breathe. Distributing
newspapers
 to residents around the town takes time.
Consequently
, some individuals might not be able to receive updates
of
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 the world situation if they live beyond the middle of the city. In Thailand, some
books
 are impossible to be found in stores since the manufacturers no longer produce them. Those
books
 sometimes contain vital knowledge of particular topics. Uploading them online means
those valuable information
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that valuable information
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are
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is
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 preserved and accessible to the public. Reading is going to be more popular if the resources are
in
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within
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 reach and free of charge. In conclusion, it is agreeable to put
books
 and
newspapers
 on online platforms because it can save money, time and natural resources. People
are
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also
 be able to find things that they want to read easier.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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