Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.
These days,
people
are suffering from different diseases mainly because of obesity which increases the chances of heart attacks in humans. Use synonyms
People
are suffering from other diseases because of increasing weight Use synonyms
such
as Fatty Liver and High Cholesterol in the younger generation. Some Linking Words
people
suggest that these problems can be solved by increasing the number of Use synonyms
sports
complexes in the country with minimal or no fees as not everyone can afford costly memberships. In Use synonyms
this
essay, I will discuss the impact on human health of Linking Words
this
type of change in our society.
To commence with, nowadays, with increased junk food in the market caused many problems related to health. Linking Words
In other words
, food prepared by street vendors and local shops is unhygienic and unhealthy as well. Linking Words
Still
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Still,
people
are consuming these types of foods in their daily life with no exercise in their daily routine. Use synonyms
For example
, my friend Ram, who eats street food daily in the evening after his office hours is now suffering from obesity the doctor advised him to join any Linking Words
sports
activity of his own choice but he couldn't because of the skyrocketing membership of a Use synonyms
sports
club near his home.
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Furthermore
, children are overloaded with so much intense pressure these days by schools and institutions. In spite of Linking Words
this
, they hardly play any Linking Words
sports
because of the lack of availability of good Use synonyms
sports
facilities nearby. To explicate, these days, there are not many playgrounds left to play some outdoor games Use synonyms
such
as Cricket, Hockey or Tennis for children because Linking Words
this
young generation is not very physically active or fit. Linking Words
For instance
, my niece spends most of his time playing video games after coming home from school as there are no attractive Linking Words
sports
facilities around Use synonyms
such
as Swimming, Gyms or Basketball grounds Linking Words
due to
which he is suffering from some minor health problems.
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To conclude
, In my opinion, increasing Linking Words
sports
clubs will keep them motivated towards their fitness goals and develop interests in some kind of outdoor sport which they have never experienced and it will help them increase their fitness levels.Use synonyms
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task response
Ensure that the essay directly addresses all aspects of the task. Include a balanced discussion of both points of view and provide a clear opinion at the end of the essay.
coherence cohesion
The introduction is present and provides an overview of the points to be discussed. Ensure that each paragraph is logically linked and that cohesive devices are used effectively to connect ideas throughout the essay.