The map below show the changes that occred to a town named Willington in 1780 , 1860 and 2000.

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happened in a town in Willington in 1780,1680 and 2000.

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that many facilities were added and removed

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in more detail,in 1780 there

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four areas of farms which

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care of farming.

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decreased in 1860

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about six villages in 2000.

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and three sports

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.Whatever, the bridge was a new item in 1860 and 2000 . One notable thing that wetland for birds which was developed in 2000.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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4 paragraphs

179 words

5.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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The map below show the changes that occred to a town named Willington in 1780 , 1860 and 2000.

Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermakets in some countries, many small and local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe online reading should only be used for a child to read whereas others believe only printed material should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

What are advantages and disadvantages of changing careers?

The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think, and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Ensuring that children have regular physical exercise should be the responsibility of parents and therefore schools should not waste valuable school time having sports lessons as part of the curriculum. To what extent do you agree?